[0426][이름]\'s homework
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Q. If you can be awake for 24 hours, what would you do and why?
A. If I can be awake for 24 hours, I\'ll thank you for God. Because there are many of something to do for myself.
First, I figure out which I should do first. First thing is cleaning my house. The place where I live in the house of Daejeon by myself. It is the bigger to live by myself. So I usually have to clean twice a week. One hour out of 24 hours is cleaning.
The next, it is important that is meal. We usually have three meal for breakfast, lunch and dinner, but If i awake for 24 hours, I\'ll need more three meals. So total meal time is 6 hours out of them. Therefore the rest of time is 17 hours.
In spare time, I\'ll go fishing, studying English, riding a bicycle, go hiking, reading a books, playing Golf in day after day.
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Hi Sir [이름],
You are much appreciated for this wonderful response to the homework you were given. I find the story amusing because you have lots of things to do in just 24 hours. You did well in writing the sentences, so way to go!
-Rachel
If I can be awake for 24 hours, I\'ll thank you for God. Because there are many of something to do for myself.
>> If I can be awake for 24 hours, I\'ll thank God for it because there are many things I want to do for myself.
First, I figure out which I should do first.
First, I figure out which I should do first.
>> correct
>> First, I\'ll figure out what I should do first.
First thing is cleaning my house. The place where I live in the house of Daejeon by myself. It is the bigger to live by myself. So I usually have to clean twice a week. One hour out of 24 hours is cleaning.
>> Perhaps I should clean my house first because the place I live in Daejon is big for myself as I am alone, so I usually clean it twice a week, but if I would be awake 24 hours then I should make it a priority.
The next, it is important that is meal.
The next, it is important that is meal.
>> The next thing is my meals.
We usually have three meal for breakfast, lunch and dinner, but If i awake for 24 hours, I\'ll need more three meals. So total meal time is 6 hours out of them. Therefore the rest of time is 17 hours.
>> We usually have three meals a day, but if I would be awake for 24 hours then I have to add three more meals to make it a total of six.
In spare time, I\'ll go fishing, studying English, riding a bicycle, go hiking, reading a books, playing Golf in day after day.
In spare time, I\'ll go fishing, studying English, riding a bicycle, go hiking, reading a books, playing Golf in day after day.
>> For the rest of the time, I would go fishing, study English, ride my bicycle, go hiking or play golf.
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