1024[이름]\'s Homework
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Q. Are there really diseases that you think humans could totally get rid of if we tried?
A. I think so, exactly.
I would say that is cold, obesity, especially Diabetes. There is so many diseases and we can overcome these diseases by only exercise.
They have many kind of sports that is workout, walking etc.
I think best of best is exerxise for healthy and get rid of diseases.
Also It is important to prevent diseases.
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Hi Mr. [이름].
Here are the corrections.
I would say that is cold, obesity, especially Diabetes. There is so many diseases and we can overcome these diseases by only exercise.
>>I would say that is cold, obesity, especially diabetes. There are so many diseases and we can overcome them by only exercising.
They have many kind of sports that is workout, walking etc.
>>There are many ways on ho to overcome these diseases like workout, walking, etc.
I think best of best is exerxise for healthy and get rid of diseases. Also It is important to prevent diseases.
>>I think exercising is the best way to get rid of diseases. Also It is important to prevent diseases.
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