[1030][이름]\'s homework
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Q.Do you think a mother should stay at home and take care of her baby after giving birth?
A. I think so, of course. but I had changed this think a long time ago. Cause the think that mother have to take care of baby, most of couples try not to have a baby, or they wants to have a only one. Also the reason why the population be reduced gradually.
They have to work hard that they live to enough life, to get a promoton, to themseves dle age. So now I think that they have to take care of baby together, have to devide to 50:50 for housework, need a parenting to do that.
Now man and woman is generation of equality. Thank you.
This was very difficult question.
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Hi Mr. [이름]!
Just a reminder to call you at 7:00 on the 5th of November if you did not change your schedule.
But, please directly change your class schedule on the website if you have time.
Here are the corrections.
I think so, of course. but I had changed this think a long time ago. Cause the think that mother have to take care of baby, most of couples try not to have a baby, or they wants to have a only one.
>>I think so, of course. But I had changed this thought a long time ago. Because thinking that mother have to take care of the baby, most of couples try not to have a baby, or they want to have only one.
Also the reason why the population be reduced gradually. They have to work hard that they live to enough life, to get a promoton, to themseves dle age.
>>Also, this is the reason why the population reduced gradually. They have to work hard to live life and to get a promotion.
So now I think that they have to take care of baby together, have to devide to 50:50 for housework, need a parenting to do that.
>>So now, I think that they have to take care of the baby together, have to divide the house works for each.
Now man and woman is generation of equality. Thank you.
>>Now, a man and a woman have to be equal all the way. Thank you.
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