5/6영작교정
학생이 쓴 원문
+homework
Q:What do you think the differences are between male and female brains?
A:I think male’s brain is more developed for space perception than female. I’ve felt it when I was kids, my older brother is better than me for that. But also I felt female’s brain is better for sympathy. but I didn’t really think about this. I think it could be person by person not for male or female.
Also I read an article before there is not exist male’s brain or female’s brain.
+my thing
Q: what do you do in your spare time?
A: In Korea there’s a radio channel called “Cheol Pa M”, which is where I get my daily news updates. And I can learn english expression as well. So that is very helpful for me. I like the way I spend my time like this.
When I listen to the radio, I feel like I become more positive.
강사 첨삭
Hello Donna!
Thank you for sending in your compositions today. I had a fun time reading your opinions about the topic. Keep up the good work. ^^
~~teacher Kate
(1st)
I think male’s brain is more developed for space perception than female. >>CORRECT!
I’ve felt it when I was kids, my older brother is better than me for that.
>>I’ve felt it when I was a kid, my older brother is better than me in that area.
But also I felt female’s brain is better for sympathy. but I didn’t really think about this.
>>On the other hand, I felt that the female’s brain is better for sympathy but I didn’t really think about this.
I think it could be person by person not for male or female.
>>I think it could depend on the person and not whether someone is male or female.
Also I read an article before there is not exist male’s brain or female’s brain.
>>Also I read an article before there is no such thing as a male’s brain or a female’s brain.
(2nd)
In Korea there’s a radio channel called “Cheol Pa M”, which is where I get my daily news updates.
>>CORRECT!
And I can learn english expression as well. So that is very helpful for me.
>>I can learn English expression as well. So that is very helpful for me.
I like the way I spend my time like this.
>>CORRECT!
When I listen to the radio, I feel like I become more positive.
When I listen to the radio, I feel like I become more positive.
>>CORRECT!
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