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2020-05-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

+I think there is typo I give up my major. >I haven\'t applied my major with he jobs I had. +homework Q:Do you think our society is too dependent on technology like smartphones?Why A:I think our society is too dependent on technology. It is hard to explain the reason but I feel that is true. Nowadays most of electronic products arebased on AI. If it is not AI, it could be relevant like smart TV, apple watch and so on. Also we are moving towards the cashless society. Even some store don\'t take cash. All of this technology give people comfortable but i think it is problem. Because I don\'t want to imagine a day without my smartphone. Just thinking about this already makes me uncomfortable +I prepare interview A I am always confident and I do what I want to do Whatever I do, I have courage as well. When I look at someone who’s full of confidence, I feel the positivity, that’s why I believe that. I can produce good results for this company. I would say that is my stength

강사 첨삭

Hi Donna! Thank you for spending a little of your time with your homework. I appreciate the effort! ^ ^

Thank you for noticing the typo error on your feedback and going over them as well. It could help you a lot. ^ ^

You did great with the homework. I just made a little revision with some of your sentence to make them sound more appealing. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah

+I think there is typo
I give up my major.
>I haven\'t applied my major with he jobs I had.

>>I haven\'t applied my major with the jobs I had. (Thank you! ^ ^)

+homework
Q:Do you think our society is too dependent on technology like smartphones?Why
A:I think our society is too dependent on technology.

>>CORRECT
It is hard to explain the reason but I feel that is true.

>>CORRECT
Nowadays most of electronic products are based on AI.

>>CORRECT
If it is not AI, it could be relevant like smart TV, apple watch and so on.

>>CORRECT
Also we are moving towards the cashless society.

>>CORRECT

Even some store don\'t take cash.

>>Even some stores don\'t take/accept cash transactions anymore.
All of this technology give people comfortable but i think it is problem.

>>All of these kinds of technology give people comfort but I think it is a problem.
Because I don\'t want to imagine a day without my smartphone.

>>CORRECT or

>>I can\'t imagine my day without my smartphone.

Just thinking about this already makes me uncomfortable
>>CORRECT

+I prepare interview A
I am always confident and I do what I want to do.

>>CORRECT
Whatever I do, I have courage as well.

>>CORRECT or

>>When faced with a difficult task, I always find courage to do it.

When I look at someone who’s full of confidence, I feel the positivity, that’s why I believe that.

>>When I look at someone who’s full of confidence, I feel the positivity, and that’s why I believe I can do things no matter how challenging or difficult they are to me.

I can produce good results for this company.

>>CORRECT

I would say that is my stength

>>CORRECT (*strength)

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