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As a president i don't think she is donig well now. We can see many policies that many profits are lean to the rich people and many welfare for normal people have gone, for example scholerships given by government got smaller or even there are many students who couldn't get the scholerships , but got it in the past times. Also we can see many corruptions in Korea. And who suspended by are all very close to her. And the prosecution did nothing to them. Finally when some disasters occurs like accident of the ship Sewall, spreads of MERS, she never leads as president. She just dismissed the bosses , not to try to solve the problems.

Hello [이름]!   You did well today. However you need to avoid run-on sentences. They are sentences that contain too many ideas without proper punctuation. These can be highly distracting to readers and prevent the writer from successfully communicating key information. Check this out to learn the ways on how to fix a run-on sentence. http://www.lsa.umich.edu/sweetland/undergraduate/writingguides/whatisarunonsentencehowdoifixit   Teacher Venus^^   As a president i don\'t think she is donig well now. >>>As a president I don\'t think she is doing well now. We can see many policies that many profits are lean to the rich people and many welfare for normal people have gone, for example scholerships given by government got smaller or even there are many students who couldn\'t get the scholerships , but got it in the past times. >>>We can see many policies that profit the rich people. Also, much welfare for normal people has gone. For example, scholarships given by government got smaller. There are even many students who couldn\'t get the scholarships but got them in the past. Also we can see many corruptions in Korea. >>>CORRECT And who suspended by are all very close to her. >>>All those who were suspended are very close to her. And the prosecution did nothing to them. >>>CORRECTFinally when some disasters occurs like accident of the ship Sewall, spreads of MERS, she never leads as president. >>>Finally when some disasters occur like the Sewall ferry accident and the MERS outbreak, she never leads as the president. She just dismissed the bosses , not to try to solve the problems. >>>She just dismissed the bosses. She didn\'t try to solve the problems.