Are expensive cosmetics really better than affordable ones?
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t think the expensive cosmetic is always better than affordable one. Because cosmetic companies have their main item, they usually focus on one thing. For example, MAC\'s main item is lip-stick and actually they poor at other cosmetics. And the cost of cosmetic is usually decided with brand. If the brand is high luxary, the their cosmetic is very expensive. But usually their quailty is not enough and the cost is worth from only the brand name. Therefore, we don\'t need to buy expensive cosmetics. And it is better to buy something matching with your skin-type.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Mary! You gave a strong and practical opinion supported by a clear example, which makes your answer convincing. Your comparison between brand value and actual product quality is thoughtful and realistic. I also like that you concluded with practical advice about choosing products based on skin type. To improve, focus on plural forms (cosmetics, ones), word choice (price instead of cost), and spelling (luxury, quality). Overall, your answer is logical, practical, and well-supported, great job!
-Teacher Wela
I don\'t think the expensive cosmetic is always better than affordable one.
>> I don\'t think expensive cosmetics are always better than affordable ones.
Because cosmetic companies have their main item, they usually focus on one thing.
>> Because cosmetic companies usually have a main product, they tend to focus on one thing.
For example, MAC\'s main item is lip-stick and actually they poor at other cosmetics.
>> For example, MAC\'s main product is lipstick, and they are not as strong in other cosmetics.
And the cost of cosmetic is usually decided with brand.
>> Also, the price of cosmetics is usually determined by the brand.
If the brand is high luxary, the their cosmetic is very expensive.
>> If the brand is considered high luxury, their cosmetics are usually very expensive.
But usually their quailty is not enough and the cost is worth from only the brand name.
>> However, sometimes the quality is not significantly better, and the high cost comes mainly from the brand name.
Therefore, we don\'t need to buy expensive cosmetics.
>> Therefore, we don\'t necessarily need to buy expensive cosmetics.
And it is better to buy something matching with your skin-type.
>> It is better to buy products that match your skin type.
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