Are gadgets more helpful or harmful for children’s social skills? Explain.
학생이 쓴 원문
In terms of social skills, gadgets could be harmful to kids.
To develop social skills, kids should meet various people and interact with them.
While doing that, they can learn how to treat friends and adults and what politeness is.
Technically, it\'s possible to learn those things through watching media contents, but actually it\'s really hard.
Many parents give gadgets to their kids for their convenience.
Aside from that, they have to teach their kids social skills and politeness.
강사 첨삭
Your answer clearly explains why gadgets can negatively affect children’s social skills, and your reasoning is logical and easy to follow. I like how you emphasized real-life interaction as essential for learning politeness and communication, which is a strong and practical point. Your mention of parents’ role adds depth to your argument and makes it more realistic. To improve, focus on word choice like “children” instead of “kids” in formal writing, and smoother expressions such as “by doing that” and “in reality.” Overall, your response is clear, thoughtful, and well-supported, great job!
-Teacher Wela
While doing that, they can learn how to treat friends and adults and what politeness is.
>> By doing that, they can learn how to treat friends and adults and understand politeness.
Technically, it\'s possible to learn those things through watching media contents, but actually it\'s really hard.
>> Technically, it is possible to learn those things by watching media content, but in reality, it is very difficult.
Many parents give gadgets to their kids for their convenience.
>> Many parents give gadgets to their children for convenience.
Aside from that, they have to teach their kids social skills and politeness.
>> In addition, they need to teach their children social skills and politeness.
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