Can taking time to relax, rest, or do nothing ever be valuable instead of being a waste?
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I think the activities are worth them.
First, it is easy for a person to get sick if they don\'t work without a break or do nothing and stay still.
Second, you need time to relax, rest and refresh even when it\'s hard.
Both of these reasons include health, and for your own health, you\'d better take the time to relax, rest, or do nothing.
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Hey, Ji [이름]. You showed a good ability to organize your ideas and communicate your thoughts clearly. Your writing is becoming more confident and expressive. Every piece of writing is another opportunity to grow, and your consistent effort is leading to noticeable improvement. Keep up the excellent work! ~Teacher Jane c\",)
I think the activities are worth them.
>> I think the activities are worth it.
First, it is easy for a person to get sick if they don\'t work without a break or do nothing and stay still.
>> CORRECT
Second, you need time to relax, rest and refresh even when it\'s hard.
>> Second, you need time to relax, rest, and refresh even when it\'s hard.
Both of these reasons include health, and for your own health, you\'d better take the time to relax, rest, or do nothing.
>> CORRECT
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