Day 2
학생이 쓴 원문
Write an essay about the holidays in your country. Write something about your favorite Holidays
Use the following sentence patterns.
There are a lot of holidays celebrated in my country, such as ___Lunar new year day, Buddha Day and Chuseok.
Your favorite holiday
Among all these holidays, my favorite is __Lunar new year day_______.
Reason why it’s your favorite
My favorite holiday is Lunar new year because it feels like I have one more chance to start the new year again. Lunar New Year’s Day usually falls in February after New Year’s Day on January 1st. I usually make resolutions for the new year, but it is hard to keep them. So Lunar New Year gives me another chance to refresh everything before the new year really begins.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! You clearly explained the holidays in your country and shared your favorite in a simple, natural way. I really liked your idea about Lunar New Year giving you a \"fresh start\" to reset your goals. It\'s honest and easy to relate to.
~T. Jenna
There are a lot of holidays celebrated in my country, such as Lunar new year day, Buddha Day and Chuseok.
Correct, or
>>In my country, a variety of holidays are observed, including Lunar New Year, Buddha’s Birthday, and Chuseok.
Among all these holidays, my favorite is Lunar new year day.
>>Among all these holidays, my favorite is Lunar New Year.
My favorite holiday is Lunar new year because it feels like I have one more chance to start the new year again.
Correct, or
>>My favorite holiday is Lunar New Year because it feels like I get one more chance to start the year fresh.
Lunar New Year’s Day usually falls in February after New Year’s Day on January 1st.
Correct, or
>>Lunar New Year usually falls in February, after January 1st New Year’s Day.
I usually make resolutions for the new year, but it is hard to keep them.
Correct, or
>>I usually make New Year’s resolutions, but I find them hard to keep.
So Lunar New Year gives me another chance to refresh everything before the new year really begins.
Correct, or
>> So Lunar New Year gives me another chance to reset everything and start again before the year fully gets underway.
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In my country, we celebrate many holidays such as Lunar New Year, Buddha’s Birthday, and Chuseok. Among them, my favorite holiday is Lunar New Year. I like Lunar New Year because it feels like I get a second chance to start the year fresh. In Korea, Lunar New Year usually comes in February, after January 1st New Year’s Day. Even though I always make New Year’s resolutions at the beginning of January, I often struggle to keep them consistently. That’s why Lunar New Year feels special to me. It gives me another opportunity to reflect, reset my goals, and begin again with a clearer mindset before the year fully gets underway.
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