Do celebrities create unrealistic beauty standards?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it affects to beauty standards. Celebrities are very tall and thin because people usually looks fatter than real in television. And they have to make up every schedule. Actually it is very hard to lose wights and make up as celebrities, even it might be harmful to our body. However, there a lot of people who want to be like celebrities. And this causes beauty trend.
But, I think the reason why celebirites have to lose weights and make up is it is their job. So, because we\'re not celebrities, we need to mimic them.
강사 첨삭
Happy Midweek, Mary! You gave a thoughtful and balanced opinion. I like that you discussed both sides — how celebrities influence beauty standards and why we shouldn\'t necessarily follow them. Your reasoning is clear and realistic, especially when you mentioned that maintaining celebrity-level appearance can be difficult and even harmful. To improve, focus on grammar (there are, look heavier), word forms (trends, weight), and clarity of ideas. Overall, your answer is logical, balanced, and insightful, great work!
-Teacher Wela
I think it affects to beauty standards.
>> I think celebrities affect beauty standards.
Celebrities are very tall and thin because people usually looks fatter than real in television.
>> Celebrities are often very tall and thin because people usually look heavier than in real life on television.
And they have to make up every schedule.
>> They also have to wear makeup for every schedule.
Actually it is very hard to lose wights and make up as celebrities, even it might be harmful to our body.
>> Actually, it is very hard to lose weight and wear makeup like celebrities, and it may even be harmful to our bodies.
However, there a lot of people who want to be like celebrities.
>> However, there are a lot of people who want to be like celebrities.
And this causes beauty trend.
>> This creates beauty trends.
But, I think the reason why celebirites have to lose weights and make up is it is their job.
>> However, I think celebrities lose weight and wear makeup because it is part of their job.
So, because we\'re not celebrities, we need to mimic them.
>> So, because we are not celebrities, we don\'t need to mimic them.
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