Do you think kindness is a sign of strength or weakness? Explain
학생이 쓴 원문
I think kindness is a sign of strength.
Kindness is something we can give others when we have peach of mind and enough emotional room.
When we are weak, anxious, or feel overwhelmed, it\'s hard to be kind to others.
Also, when people feel happy and good, they tend to treat other so well and happily.
That\'s why i think kindness can be power from strong strength.
Moreover, i want to control mind in order to feel peaceful and happy so that i can give kindness to others.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Serena!
This is a very thoughtful composition. I like how you explained kindness from a deeper perspective and connected it with emotional control and personal growth. Your ideas feel mature and meaningful.
Your writing has a clear flow, and your conclusion shows your own personal goal, which makes the composition more sincere.
~Teacher Polly
I think kindness is a sign of strength.
Kindness is something we can give others when we have peach of mind and enough emotional room.
When we are weak, anxious, or feel overwhelmed, it\'s hard to be kind to others.
Also, when people feel happy and good, they tend to treat other so well and happily.
>>CORRECT
Kindness is something we can give others when we have peach of mind and enough emotional room.
>>Kindness is something we can give to others when we have peace of mind and enough emotional space.
When we are weak, anxious, or feel overwhelmed, it\'s hard to be kind to others.
>>CORRECT
Also, when people feel happy and good, they tend to treat other so well and happily.
>>On the other hand, when people feel happy and positive, they tend to treat others well and kindly.
That\'s why i think kindness can be power from strong strength.
>>That’s why I think kindness comes from inner strength.
Moreover, i want to control mind in order to feel peaceful and happy so that i can give kindness to others.
>>Moreover, I want to control my mind in order to feel peaceful and happy so that I can show kindness to others.
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