Do you think music can influence people’s emotions or behavior? Give an example.
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I totally agree with that.
For examples, I listen to rock or hip-hop during working out.
And I sometimes go to a club or pub and enjoy noisy and fast tempo music.
It makes me feel excited and energetic.
Conversely, I listen to jazz or ballad during studying or dinner with my wife.
It can make the mood more romantic and relaxing.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름] [이름]! Your answer clearly explains how music influences emotions and behavior, and your examples make your idea very easy to understand. I like how you contrasted energetic music (rock and hip-hop) with relaxing music (jazz and ballads), which shows strong awareness of different emotional effects. Your response is also personal and natural, especially when you mention your daily activities. To improve, focus on small grammar details like “for example,” “while working out,” and plural forms like “ballads.” Overall, your answer is well-structured, relatable, and effectively supports your opinion, great job!
-Teacher Wela
For examples, I listen to rock or hip-hop during working out.
>> For example, I listen to rock or hip-hop while working out.
And I sometimes go to a club or pub and enjoy noisy and fast tempo music.
>> I sometimes go to a club or pub and enjoy loud, fast-tempo music.
Conversely, I listen to jazz or ballad during studying or dinner with my wife.
>> Conversely, I listen to jazz or ballads while studying or having dinner with my wife.
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