Do you think smartphones are powerful enough already?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think current smartphone still has plenty of room for further improvement. We can imagine that smartphones com[이름]e with VR. In fact, AR which com[이름]e reality in smartphone screen is already used widely. Moreover, Apple recently introduce Apple Vision which is utilized VR technology. If the techonolgy is improved in the future, we able to make calls where other person in front of us like in VR as we watched in a movie.
강사 첨삭
Happy Midweek, Mary! Your answer presents a forward-thinking and interesting perspective on future smartphone technology, especially your ideas about VR and AR integration. Mentioning real-world examples like Apple Vision strengthens your argument and shows strong awareness of technological trends. Your explanation flows logically from current technology to future possibilities. To improve, focus on plural forms, verb tense consistency, and clearer sentence structures. Overall, your response is insightful, imaginative, and well-supported with examples, great job!
-Teacher Wela
I think current smartphone still has plenty of room for further improvement.
>> I think current smartphones still have plenty of room for further improvement.
We can imagine that smartphones com[이름]e with VR.
>> We can imagine smartphones being com[이름]ed with VR.
In fact, AR which com[이름]e reality in smartphone screen is already used widely.
>> In fact, AR, which com[이름]es reality with a smartphone screen, is already widely used.
Moreover, Apple recently introduce Apple Vision which is utilized VR technology.
>> Moreover, Apple recently introduced Apple Vision, which utilizes VR technology.
If the techonolgy is improved in the future, we able to make calls where other person in front of us like in VR as we watched in a movie.
>> If the technology improves in the future, we may be able to make calls where the other person appears in front of us in VR, like we see in movies.
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