Do you think technology (phones, social media) should be avoided on vacation?
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t do SNS very much, but my wife likes it.
She likes sharing to her friends what she is doing and where she is.
And she always upload pictures of food, surroundings and us on SNS.
I think that kind of actions make vacation more excited.
So, I don\'t think we should avoid technology on vacation.
강사 첨삭
Your answer is clear, personal, and easy to understand. Using your wife\'s example makes your opinion more natural and relatable. I also like how you explained the positive side of using technology during vacations, such as sharing memories and making the experience more exciting. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement (upload → uploads), plural forms (vacations), and natural phrases (share with friends). Overall, your response is natural, personal, and well-organized, great job!
-Teacher Wela
I don\'t do SNS very much, but my wife likes it.
>> I don\'t use social media very much, but my wife likes it.
She likes sharing to her friends what she is doing and where she is.
>> She likes sharing with her friends what she is doing and where she is.
And she always upload pictures of food, surroundings and us on SNS.
>> She always uploads pictures of food, surroundings, and us on social media.
I think that kind of actions make vacation more excited.
>> I think those kinds of actions make vacations more exciting.
So, I don\'t think we should avoid technology on vacation.
>> So, I don\'t think we should avoid technology on vacation.
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