Do you think travelling abroad can change the way people think?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, many people these days believe travelling abroad can affect the way people think or broaden their perspectives. And I more or less agree with them. From county to country, people have their unique cultures, customs and values. For example, East Asian countries people value humility and manners since they were deeply influenced by Confucian thoughts. So as a Korean, I\'m not familiar with discussion cultures. On the other hand, when I met and communicated with foreigners, I felt they were inclined to express their opinions and feelings more freely. In this way, when engaging with people from different cultures, not just travelling, people can understand other ways of thinking, traditions and values. Thus, I\'d like to experience diverse cultures and become an open-minded person in the future.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for honestly sharing your perspective with good cultural examples. Our class itself is a great example of cultural exchange without needing to travel, since we bring different perspectives into one space. I believe traveling is not just about the place but also about the locals and culture that make me want to stay.
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
In my opinion, many people these days believe travelling abroad can affect the way people think or broaden their perspectives.
~ CORRECT.
And I more or less agree with them.
~ CORRECT.
From county to country, people have their unique cultures, customs and values.
~ From country to country, people have their unique cultures, customs, and values.
For example, East Asian countries people value humility and manners since they were deeply influenced by Confucian thoughts.
~ For example, in East Asian countries, people value humility and manners since they were deeply influenced by Confucian thought.
So as a Korean, I\'m not familiar with discussion cultures.
~ As a Korean, I’m not familiar with discussion cultures.
On the other hand, when I met and communicated with foreigners, I felt they were inclined to express their opinions and feelings more freely.
~ CORRECT.
In this way, when engaging with people from different cultures, not just travelling, people can understand other ways of thinking, traditions and values.
~ CORRECT.
Thus, I\'d like to experience diverse cultures and become an open-minded person in the future.
~ CORRECT.
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