Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Many believe that to be successful in a particular sport, having a natural ability is more important than training and hard work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In this discussion, i intend to say clearly, every activity include sports need talent. But that doesn\'t mean effrot is useless.
if anything, i think that effort is most important thing all action. talent is important too.
The thing is balance. we keep amount between gift and hard work.
Nevertheless, if i have to choose one thing, i select effort because talent guarantee a quality, but effort guarantee a period.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon Lee! Thank you for diligently writing your homework! Your essay presents a sensible and balanced viewpoint. With a few examples and deeper explanation of your key ideas, it could become much more persuasive. Job well done!
The thing is balance. we keep amount between gift and hard work.
Nevertheless, if i have to choose one thing, i select effort because talent guarantee a quality, but effort guarantee a period.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
In this discussion, i intend to say clearly, every activity include sports need talent. But that doesn\'t mean effrot is useless.
>>> In this discussion, I want to make it clear that every activity, including sports, requires talent. However, that does not mean effort is useless.
if anything, i think that effort is most important thing all action. talent is important too.
>>> If anything, I believe that effort is the most important factor in any endeavor. Talent is important as well.
The thing is balance. we keep amount between gift and hard work.
>>> The key is balance: we must find the right proportion between natural ability and hard work.
Nevertheless, if i have to choose one thing, i select effort because talent guarantee a quality, but effort guarantee a period.
>>> Nevertheless, if I had to choose one, I would choose effort because talent may guarantee quality, but effort guarantees duration.
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