Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Tell me about a challenge or conflict you’ve faced at work , and how you dealt with it.
During my first participation at VITAFOODS Asia in Bangkok, our booth was located in a less visible area, which made it difficult to attract buyers.
>>During my first participation in VITAFOODS Asia in Bangkok, our booth was located in a less visible area, which made it difficult to attract buyers.
To improve this, I prepared a manufacturing process video to highlight our product quality and provided samples so buyers could experience the products directly.
>>Correct, or: To address this, I prepared a manufacturing process video to highlight our product quality and provided samples so buyers could experience the products firsthand.
I also developed customized sales materials based on the needs of ASEAN buyers.
>>Correct, or: I also developed customized sales materials tailored to the needs of ASEAN buyers.
As a result, the number of one-on-one buyer meetings increased by more than 200% compared to the previous year, and we successfully generated several potential business opportunities for future partnerships.
>>Correct, or: As a result, the number of one-on-one buyer meetings increased by more than 200% compared to the previous year, and we generated several promising business opportunities for future partnerships.
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One challenge I faced was during my first participation at VITAFOODS Asia in Bangkok, where our booth was in a less visible location and attracted fewer visitors. To address this, I created a manufacturing process video to showcase our product quality, offered product samples, and prepared customized sales materials tailored to ASEAN buyers. These efforts helped capture visitors’ attention and encouraged more meaningful conversations. As a result, the number of one-on-one buyer meetings increased by over 200% compared to the previous year, leading to several promising business opportunities.
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