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I think earning a high salary more is important than job satisfaction.
This is because salarymen work to make a living.
Job satisfaction is important but it is not the only way to achieve happiness.
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This is because salarymen work to make a living.
Job satisfaction is important but it is not the only way to achieve happiness.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think earning a high salary more is important than job satisfaction.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> I believe that earning a high salary is more important than having job satisfaction.
This is because salarymen work to make a living.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>>This is because most people work primarily to make a living and support themselves and their families.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> Although job satisfaction plays an important role in overall well-being, it is not the only source of happiness.
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