Homework 3
학생이 쓴 원문
I live in an suji-gu apartment it has 15 floors. Our neighborhood has not a lot of apartment complex, there are just five, I think it is safe and quiet to live a life.
In front of apartment building, park located which people can walk around and talk to each other. In addition, kids can play at ground, ride, and do fun activities.
One of the other advantages, there is a local express bus so we can reach far away places rather than taking the subway.
Therefore, there are so many amenities, structures, and convenience that my apartment offers. That gives me cozy and warm mood, also makes my life comfortable and conducive.
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>>> I live in an Suji-gu apartment, it has 15 floors. Our neighborhood has not a lot of apartment complexes, there are just five. I think it is safe and quiet place to live in.
In front of apartment building, park located which people can walk around and talk to each other. In addition, kids can play at ground, ride, and do fun activities.
In front of apartment building, park located which people can walk around and talk to each other. In addition, kids can play at ground, ride, and do fun activities.
>>> In front of the apartment building, a park is located where people can walk around and talk to each other. In addition, kids can play at the ground, ride, and do fun activities.
One of the other advantages, there is a local express bus so we can reach far away places rather than taking the subway.
One of the other advantages, there is a local express bus so we can reach far away places rather than taking the subway.
>>> One of the other advantages is the local express bus that can reach far away places rather than taking the subway.
Therefore, there are so many amenities, structures, and convenience that my apartment offers. That gives me cozy and warm mood, also makes my life comfortable and conducive.
Therefore, there are so many amenities, structures, and convenience that my apartment offers. That gives me cozy and warm mood, also makes my life comfortable and conducive.
>>> Therefore, there are so many amenities, structures, and convenience that my neighborhood offers. That gives me a cozy and warm mood; it also makes my life comfortable and conducive.
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