Homework 4
학생이 쓴 원문
My family usually has dinner together Fridays or Saturday. I think it’s a good timing to have a great time together after a whole week of work.
We often eat out, but rather than that, our family and I prefer eating at home more. Because, we are all big foodies, and at home we can choose froom various food menus.
And one of the essential things is to have a drink with the meal.
Just like the food menu, we just drink something regardless of the alcohol type. We’re pretty flexible about that.
And once everyting is well prepared, the dinner dishes and drinks, we share things about our week and have conversation about the future. That kind of conversation really helps remove our stress.
Tomorrow is Saturday, and we’re going to have this kind of time together. So I’m really looking forward to it.
강사 첨삭
Hello there, Jenny!
Your answers are getting more sophisticated as weeks go by. The way you speak is the way you write. Hence, here are some suggestions for your output below:
1. Avoid being redundant. When you use a word in a sentence, avoid mentioning the same term. This is a good mental practice to stretch you vocabulary.
2. Sentences do not usually begin with \'AND\' since this is a conjunction that connects ideas within sentences.
3. Always be specific and get rid of expressions such as \"something\", \"anything\", etc. Instead, tell exactly what that thing is. Remember, speaking time is limited, so express the idea specifically/ precisely.
4. Finally, end smoothly by repeating all the ideas in the entire discussion/ answer through a memorable but concise point.
Overall, your answer below is very satisfactory considering all the suggestions, inclusions, and your initial output in class. Keep up the good work!
See you on Monday. Happy weekend!
-T. Donna~
>>> My family usually has dinner together on Fridays or Saturdays. I think it’s a good timing to have quality time together after a whole week of work.
We often eat out, but rather than that, our family and I prefer eating at home more. Because, we are all big foodies, and at home we can choose froom various food menus.
We often eat out, but rather than that, our family and I prefer eating at home more. Because, we are all big foodies, and at home we can choose froom various food menus.
>>> We often eat out, but rather than that, our family prefers eating at home more because we are all big foodies, and at home we can choose from various food menus.
And one of the essential things is to have a drink with the meal.
And one of the essential things is to have a drink with the meal.
>>> One of the essential things is to have a drink with the meal.
Just like the food menu, we just drink something regardless of the alcohol type. We’re pretty flexible about that.
Just like the food menu, we just drink something regardless of the alcohol type. We’re pretty flexible about that.
>>> Just like the food menu, we just drink regardless of the alcohol type. We’re pretty flexible about that.
And once everyting is well prepared, the dinner dishes and drinks, we share things about our week and have conversation about the future. That kind of conversation really helps remove our stress.
And once everyting is well prepared, the dinner dishes and drinks, we share things about our week and have conversation about the future. That kind of conversation really helps remove our stress.
>>> And once everything is well prepared for the dinner dishes and drinks, we share things about our week and have conversation about the future. That kind of (sharing/ discussion) really helps remove our stress.
Tomorrow is Saturday, and we’re going to have this kind of time together. So I’m really looking forward to it.
Tomorrow is Saturday, and we’re going to have this kind of time together. So I’m really looking forward to it.
>>> Correct!
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