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I contributed to my team by developing new buyers and managing orders from existing customers. For new buyer development, I participated in various international trade exhibitions, met with potential buyers, introduced our products, and successfully secured contracts. After the contracts were signed, I was responsible for the entire process, including preparing and updating registration documents, coordinating production, and managing shipment schedules. By overseeing each project from the initial inquiry to final delivery, I helped increase the profitability of our overseas business. As a result, our team consistently achieved its annual targets, and I contributed to increasing sales revenue by more than 15% each ye
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Hello, Ms. [Name][이름]!
~T. Jenna
I contributed to my team by developing new buyers and managing orders from existing customers.
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For new buyer development, I participated in various international trade exhibitions, met with potential buyers, introduced our products, and successfully secured contracts.
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After the contracts were signed, I was responsible for the entire process, including preparing and updating registration documents, coordinating production, and managing shipment schedules.
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By overseeing each project from the initial inquiry to final delivery, I helped increase the profitability of our overseas business.
>>By overseeing each project from the initial inquiry to the final delivery, I helped increase the profitability of our overseas business.
As a result, our team consistently achieved its annual targets, and I contributed to increasing sales revenue by more than 15% each year.
>>Correct
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I contributed to my team by developing new overseas buyers and managing orders from existing customers. I attended international trade exhibitions, introduced our products to potential clients, and successfully secured new contracts. After that, I managed the entire process, including documentation, production coordination, and shipment schedules, to ensure smooth delivery. By handling projects from the initial inquiry to the final shipment, I helped our team consistently achieve its annual goals and contributed to increasing sales revenue by more than 15% each year.
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