How does social media influence people\'s identity and self-worth?
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I think social media has more bad effects on people\'s identity and self-worth than good effects.
Because social media is highly addictive and even if you use it to increase people\'s identity and self-worth, you may become more obsessed with it than other aspects and get used to lying repeatedly. In addition, since it is a highly advanced digital world, crimes using social media are increasing, and personal information that has never been cared about has become important, so bad influence has increased.
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Hello, Ms. [이름]! I completely agree with you. I think your ideas about social media are really insightful. You pointed out how it can affect both identity and self-worth, and you also considered the risks in today’s digital world, like crime and privacy issues. I like that you didn’t just focus on the negatives personally, but also looked at the bigger picture.
-T. Sonny
I think social media has more bad effects on people\'s identity and self-worth than good effects.
>>I think social media has more negative effects on people’s identity and self-worth than positive ones.
Because social media is highly addictive and even if you use it to increase people\'s identity and self-worth, you may become more obsessed with it than other aspects and get used to lying repeatedly.
Because social media is highly addictive and even if you use it to increase people\'s identity and self-worth, you may become more obsessed with it than other aspects and get used to lying repeatedly.
>>Social media is highly addictive, and even if it is used to boost self-esteem, people may become more obsessed with it than with other aspects of life and may get used to presenting a false image repeatedly.
In addition, since it is a highly advanced digital world, crimes using social media are increasing, and personal information that has never been cared about has become important, so bad influence has increased.
>>In addition, in today’s advanced digital world, crimes involving social media are increasing, and personal information that was once ignored has become highly important, which has amplified its negative influence.
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