How has technology made solo living easier or more appealing?
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The development of technology made solo living more convenient and comfortable. First, there are many apps that support solo living. One concern of solo living is that there needs to be someone or something to look after you in an emergency. There are various predictive home systems and routine apps that monitor people’s daily routines and alert when anomalies occur, providing a safe way to monitor. Alongside this, it alleviated the mental pressures of various individuals to socialise in person. Many people prefer social living and want to socialise, but do not want to deepen their relationships. Many people socialise virtually through social media. Some people prefer to find local events and shared-interest communities to limit their relationships by sharing their preferences. For example, there are various meetups held in the UK every week where people meet to pursue hobbies, but do not share information beyond the event agenda.
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Thank you for this as well, Aciel!
The development of technology made solo living more convenient and comfortable.
>>> OR: The development of technology has made solo living more convenient and comfortable.
First, there are many apps that support solo living. >>> correct
One concern of solo living is that there needs to be someone or something to look after you in an emergency.
>>> OR: One concern of solo living is the need for someone or something to look after you in an emergency.
There are various predictive home systems and routine apps that monitor people’s daily routines and alert when anomalies occur, providing a safe way to monitor.
>>> OR: There are various predictive home systems and routine apps that monitor people’s daily routines and alert them when anomalies occur, providing a safer way to monitor one’s living environment.
Alongside this, it alleviated the mental pressures of various individuals to socialize in person.
>>> correct
Many people prefer social living and want to socialize, but do not want to deepen their relationships.
>>> correct
Many people socialize virtually through social media.
>>> correct
Some people prefer to find local events and shared-interest communities to limit their relationships by sharing their preferences.
>>> correct
For example, there are various meetups held in the UK every week where people meet to pursue hobbies, but do not share information beyond the event agenda.
>>> correct
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