How I hear about this position
학생이 쓴 원문
I put a lot of effort into finding the position since it aligns with my interest.
Experiences of holding several events and managing budget made me familiar with negotiations. Furthermore, I learned how to communicate with customers at a volunteer program. Based on these two experiences, I did internship last year, and found an interest in procurement, which both negotiation and communication skills are required.
On the other hand, I was also interested in tourism. Especially, the project that connects domestic tourism business or local communities to tourism companies abroad to promote several tourism sites or heritage sites requires both negotiation and communication skills. That’s what I wanted to do for job. So I checked your annual plan of recruitment at the beginning of the year, and found out that you are planning to start it in March. Then from the beginning of March, I checked career page on company’s homepage. That’s how I was able to apply for this position.
강사 첨삭
Hi Rennie!
Thanks for sending your draft. Do review the two versions provided and we can talk more about them during the class.
Cheers,
Jean~~
I put a lot of effort into finding the position since it aligns with my interest. Experiences of holding several events and managing budget made me familiar with negotiations. Furthermore, I learned how to communicate with customers at a volunteer program. Based on these two experiences, I did internship last year, and found an interest in procurement, which both negotiation and communication skills are required. On the other hand, I was also interested in tourism. Especially, the project that connects domestic tourism business or local communities to tourism companies abroad to promote several tourism sites or heritage sites requires both negotiation and communication skills. That’s what I wanted to do for job. So I checked your annual plan of recruitment at the beginning of the year, and found out that you are planning to start it in March. Then from the beginning of March, I checked career page on company’s homepage. That’s how I was able to apply for this position.
LONG VERSION:
I was very intentional in seeking out this position because it aligns closely with my interests. Through organizing several events and managing budgets, I became familiar with negotiation, and during a volunteer program I developed strong communication skills with customers. These experiences led me to pursue an internship last year, where I discovered a genuine interest in procurement—a field that requires both negotiation and communication.
At the same time, I was also drawn to tourism projects, especially those that connect domestic businesses and local communities with international companies to promote heritage sites. That overlap reinforced my motivation to find a role where I could apply these skills. Early this year, I reviewed your agency’s annual recruitment plan and saw that hiring would begin in March. From then on, I regularly checked your careers page, and when the posting appeared, I applied right away.
SHORT VERSION:
I was actively looking for a role that matched my skills in negotiation and communication, which I developed through event management, volunteering, and an internship in procurement. Knowing your company’s recruitment plan would begin in March, I monitored the careers page and applied as soon as the position opened. That’s how I found this opportunity.
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