HW 4.27
학생이 쓴 원문
I think people should use these gadgets more to make their life more comfortable. Smart phones can make us to access information easily and discover new information. Smart watch can detect our body\'s signals and notify us whether we are healthy or not right now. Lap top can let us not moving in front of a computer, so we can use them on cafes, library, and so on. We can take very unique photos by using drones. We can make our car to the party place by using blue tooth speaker.
So, human\'s life would be easier and more comfortable by using this tools.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름] [이름]!
In the history of man, cutting edge technology has been utilized to better his life, if not, the source of his demise. If used appropriately it gives comfort and delivers quick results. On the other hand if used wrongly, can be detrimental.
For your examples, you pointed out the positive and fun parts of gadgets. It really depends on our purpose of use. So, use them wisely at all times.
For my grammar suggestions, kindly compare yours to the underlines parts. Overall, well done!
Thank you for your diligence. See you.
-T. Donna~
>>> I think people should use gadgets more to make their lives more comfortable. Smart phones can make us access information and discover new information easily. Smart watch can detect our body\'s signals and notify us whether we are healthy or not right now. Lap top can let us not move in front of a computer, so we can use them on cafes, library, and so on. We can take very unique photos by using drones. We can make our car to the party place by using a blue tooth speaker.
So, human\'s life would be easier and more comfortable by using this tools.
So, human\'s life would be easier and more comfortable by using this tools.
>>> So, human\'s/ people\'s lives would be easier and more comfortable by using these tools.
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