HW 5.04
학생이 쓴 원문
I guess the most famous tourist attraction for foreigners is Itaewon in Seoul. I\'ve never been there, but I heard that there are many dance clubs in Itaewon, so many young Korean and foreigners are visiting to relieve stress. I heard that there are many diverse clubs, so a famous place for LGBT in Korea.
And the TV drama Itaewon Class is the reason why Itaewon is famous for foreigners, especially among Japanese. I heard that it was so popular four years ago, and it\'s still well known now days.
But there was a tragic accident in Itaewon on Halloween in 2022, and many people died. So, I don\'t want to go there, kind of scarry.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름] [이름]!
Itaewon is described as an international district by many people. Since Psy popularized Gangnam Style more than a decade ago, it should be so famous too. Nevertheless, Itaewon had been on the international headlines due to the massive and mysterious death of more than a hundred of people in 2022.
After that time, crowding in any public place such as the BTS concert or a simple rally is highly monitored by the police since then.
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>>> I guess the most famous tourist attraction for foreigners is Itaewon in Seoul. I\'ve never been there, but I heard that there are many dance clubs in Itaewon, so many young Koreans and foreigners are visiting to relieve their stress. I heard that there are (many/diverse) clubs, so a famous place is for LGBT in Korea.
And the TV drama Itaewon Class is the reason why Itaewon is famous for foreigners, especially among Japanese. I heard that it was so popular four years ago, and it\'s still well known now days.
And the TV drama Itaewon Class is the reason why Itaewon is famous for foreigners, especially among Japanese. I heard that it was so popular four years ago, and it\'s still well known now days.
>>> And the TV drama Itaewon Class is the reason why Itaewon is famous for foreigners, especially among Japanese. I heard that it was so popular four years ago, and it\'s still well-known nowadays.
But there was a tragic accident in Itaewon on Halloween in 2022, and many people died. So, I don\'t want to go there, kind of scarry.
But there was a tragic accident in Itaewon on Halloween in 2022, and many people died. So, I don\'t want to go there, kind of scarry.
>>> But there was a tragic accident in Itaewon on Halloween in 2022, and many people died. So, I don\'t want to go there, it\'s kind of scary.
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