I\'m a light packer
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When it comes to Packing, it usually depends on where I travel. If I travel remote places, there wouldn\'t be a kind of store where I would purchase my needs, it would be good to pack everything, even lots of toilet papers. But in case of traveling in the civilization world, there are tons of stores, if I need something I can always buy them. It\'s not matter I already have the same one, because they could be my souvenirs, they are different where come from, each has each memories for me. When I travel abroad, I just take one carry-on suitcase and a handbag there is my cellphone, credit cards, some money and passport in it. I don\'t need to line up for my luggage, just I carry them and go into my airplane, but I prefer to sending my luggage and walking around an airport. When I travel in my country, I only carry my cellphone, credit cards, keys and a bottle of water without my handbag, my jacket and pants have a lot of pockets. I use them, so my two hands are free, plus I feel free too.
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Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for submitting your answer. I appreciate how you explained the difference between packing for remote places and developed areas. You explained your thoughts clearly.
I also made a few corrections to help your sentences sound more natural and smooth. ^^
I also made a few corrections to help your sentences sound more natural and smooth. ^^
~ Teacher Gina
When it comes to packing, it usually depends on where I travel.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: My packing depends on my destination.
If I travel remote places, there wouldn\'t be a kind of store where I would purchase my needs, it would be good to pack everything, even lots of toilet papers.
>> If I travel to remote places, there may not be any stores where I can buy what I need, so it’s better to pack everything, even a lot of toilet paper.
But in case of traveling in the civilization world, there are tons of stores, if I need something I can always buy them.
>> But in case of traveling in the civilized area, there are tons of stores, so if I need something I can always buy it.
>> Or: But when traveling in developed areas, there are many stores, so if I need something, I can always buy it.
It\'s not matter I already have the same one, because they could be my souvenirs, they are different where come from, each has each memories for me.
>> It doesn’t matter if I already have the same item, because they can become souvenirs, and each one has different memories for me depending on where it came from.
When I travel abroad, I just take one carry-on suitcase and a handbag there is my cellphone, credit cards, some money and passport in it.
>> When I travel abroad, I just take one carry-on suitcase and a handbag, where I keep my cellphone, credit cards, some money, and my passport.
I don\'t need to line up for my luggage, just I carry them and go into my airplane, but I prefer to sending my luggage and walking around an airport.
>> I don’t need to line up for my luggage; I just carry it and board the plane, but sometimes I prefer to check in my luggage and walk around the airport.
When I travel in my country, I only carry my cellphone, credit cards, keys and a bottle of water without my handbag, my jacket and pants have a lot of pockets.
>> When I travel within my country, I only carry my cellphone, credit cards, keys, and a bottle of water without a handbag because my jacket and pants have many pockets.
I use them, so my two hands are free, plus I feel free too.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I use my pockets so my hands are free and I feel comfortable.
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