If you will have the c[이름]ce to do a job, that you have been working to do, what is it and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was a child, I had a dream, which was a nurse.
I love people, God gave me a good personality.. When I grew up, I didn’t make a my dream,but I made second of my dream which was a teaching. I had been kindergarten director for 10 years by the time I was very successful in my school. My school members have almost 175 kids. I did driving for myself. Because it was safe issue.
Sometimes I think of way back ,I miss my school. After I retired, I got part time job. It is a counseling.
Nowadays I go to my work only twice a week, It takes a lot of time. I have to read many books , after then I prepare about subject for students.It is worthy to me. Whatever I do something I try my best.
I don’t want daily life being lazy, that is why I am learning something everyday.
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- Teacher Debbie
>> correct
I love people, God gave me a good personality.
I love people, God gave me a good personality.
>> correct
When I grew up, I didn’t make a my dream,but I made second of my dream which was a teaching.
>> When I grew up, I wasn\'t able to achieve my dream so teaching became my second dream.
I had been kindergarten director for 10 years by the time I was very successful in my school.
>> I have been a kindergarten teacher for 10 years and by that time I was very successful in my school.
My school members have almost 175 kids.
>> My school has almost 175 kids.
I did driving for myself.
>> I drove for myself.
Because it was safe issue.
>> Because of safety issues.
Sometimes I think of way back ,I miss my school.
Sometimes I think of way back ,I miss my school.
>> Sometimes when I think of the past, I miss my school.
After I retired, I got part time job.
>> correct
It is a counseling.
>> Which is counseling.
Nowadays I go to my work only twice a week, It takes a lot of time.
Nowadays I go to my work only twice a week, It takes a lot of time.
>> Nowadays, I go to my work only twice a week which takes a lot of time.
I have to read many books , after then I prepare about subject for students.
>> I have to read many books and prepare about the subject for the students.
It is worthy to me.
>> correct
Whatever I do something I try my best.
>> Whenever I do something, I try my best.
I don’t want daily life being lazy, that is why I am learning something everyday.
I don’t want daily life being lazy, that is why I am learning something everyday.
>> I don\'t want to be lazy that is why I am learning something everyday.
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