Is job experience more important than formal education? Explain.
학생이 쓴 원문
Obviously, Absolutely yes. Job experience is more important than formal education.
What you learn from formal education is actually far from real work.
Formal education doesn\'t teach you everything, and accident situations always can happen.
When you are in suddenly happened trouble, if you\'ve had a similar experience before, you can handle it easily.
I think that\'s why we value experts highly.
강사 첨삭
Your answer clearly supports your opinion and explains why practical experience can be more valuable than formal education. I like how you emphasized handling unexpected situations, which is a strong and realistic point. Your conclusion about valuing experts connects well with your argument and makes the response feel complete. To improve, focus on natural expressions like “unexpected situations” and smoother phrasing such as “face sudden trouble.” Overall, your response is clear, logical, and persuasive, great job!
-Teacher Wela
Obviously, Absolutely yes. Job experience is more important than formal education.
>> Obviously, yes. Job experience is more important than formal education.
What you learn from formal education is actually far from real work.
>> What you learn from formal education is often far from real work.
Formal education doesn\'t teach you everything, and accident situations always can happen.
>> Formal education doesn\'t teach you everything, and unexpected situations can always happen.
When you are in suddenly happened trouble, if you\'ve had a similar experience before, you can handle it easily.
>> When you face sudden trouble, if you have had a similar experience before, you can handle it easily.
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