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학생이 쓴 원문
When students consider majors and workplaces, the most important factor is an annual salary.
That is very sad because they are losing of their dream, challenge , self-identity and adventure.
The only aim of their work and job seems to gain more money.
This is clear we are becomong to slave of money in the capitalism society.
I always talk to my daughters, \"you find and study what you want to do it. and you should live indendent life without parents help \"
강사 첨삭
Good morning, Ms. [이름]!
I agree that focusing only on salary can cause people not to see the other important aspects of life, like fulfillment, growth and satisfaction. If someone chooses a career solely because it pays well, they may eventually feel unmotivated or dissatisfied, even if they earn a high income.
Aki~
When students consider majors and workplaces, the most important factor is an annual salary.
>>> When students choose a major or consider their future workplace, the most important factor is often the annual salary.
That is very sad because they are losing of their dream, challenge , self-identity and adventure.
>>> I think that\'s very sad because they may give up their dreams, their willingness to take on challenges, their sense of self-identity, and their spirit of adventure.
The only aim of their work and job seems to gain more money.
>> It seems that the only goal of having a job is to earn more money.
This is clear we are becomong to slave of money in the capitalism society.
>>> To me, this shows that we are becoming slaves to money in a capitalist society.
I always talk to my daughters, \"you find and study what you want to do it. and you should live indendent life without parents help \"
>>> I always tell my daughters to find something that they truly want to do and study that. And they should also learn to live independently without relying on us.
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