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ESSAY: The use of robots in industry will reduce the number of jobs for humans. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Well, i can\'t conclude this answer.
In conclusion, It different according to view what is more effect.
Some people who think using robots is advantages feel more comfortable about leftover time. They may be going to do something such as activities, sports, studies even thought religious things.
However, the other sides don\'t think about it. That people feel more dangerous about losing their jobs. They think that robotics occupy jobs and then, jobless have disadventages about economy, time, and essential things.
Ridiculous things, both thinking are can be come true really. We enjoy this effection and suffer this impact. Important thing is how we lead these robotics skills and future. not be dragged away.
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Good day to you! Happy Friday Lee! The weekend is waving. What\'s the plan? Anyway, thanks for your essay again and again. I\'m happy that you\'re gradually improving in writing. Goodl luck!
In conclusion, It different according to view what is more effect.
Some people who think using robots is advantages feel more comfortable about leftover time.
Ridiculous things, both thinking are can be come true really.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Well, i can\'t conclude this answer.
>>> Well, I can’t come to a conclusion about this.
In conclusion, It different according to view what is more effect.
>>> Conclusion differs according to people’s perspectives on what is more effective.
Some people who think using robots is advantages feel more comfortable about leftover time.
>>> Some people who believe that using robots is advantageous feel more comfortable with the time it saves.
They may be going to do something such as activities, sports, studies even thought religious things.
>>> They may use the extra time for activities such as sports, studying, or even religious practices.
However, the other sides don\'t think about it.
>>> However, others have a different perspective.
That people feel more dangerous about losing their jobs.
>>> They feel that robots are a threat to jobs and that automation could lead to unemployment.
They think that robotics occupy jobs and then, jobless have disadventages about economy, time, and essential things.
>>> From this point of view, jobless people may face disadvantages related to the economy, time, and access to essential needs.
Ridiculous things, both thinking are can be come true really.
>>>In reality, both perspectives can be true to some extent.
We enjoy this effection and suffer this impact.
>>> We benefit from technological progress, but we also experience its negative effects.
Important thing is how we lead these robotics skills and future. not be dragged away.
>>> The important thing is how we manage robotics and future technologies, instead of being controlled by them.
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