my homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY
ESSAY: An increasing number of people are delaying marriage until later in life. What are the advantages and disadvantages?
I think there are only shortcomings.
First of all, a child becomes at risk. Pregnancy with age can become unhealthy, and when giving birth, a child can become at risk. It can also give birth to unhealthy children.
Then, it becomes economically risky. When we need to save money, we can get out of parenting, but we can\'t save money properly in order to actually end our old age.
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First of all, a child becomes at risk.
Then, it becomes economically risky.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think there are only shortcomings.
>>> I think there are only disadvantages to consider.
First of all, a child becomes at risk.
>>> First, the child can be at risk.
Pregnancy with age can become unhealthy, and when giving birth, a child can become at risk.
>>>Pregnancy at an advanced age may lead to health complications for both the parent and the baby, and childbirth itself can become more dangerous.
It can also give birth to unhealthy children.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>>It can also increase the likelihood of having a child with health issues.
Then, it becomes economically risky.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>>I Second, it can create financial strain.
When we need to save money, we can get out of parenting, but we can\'t save money properly in order to actually end our old age.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>>Raising a child requires long-term financial stability, and if resources are limited or poorly managed, it can become difficult to support both parenting responsibilities and future needs, including preparing for old age.
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