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2026-07-22 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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The idea is that schools should teach both. We need to learn practical things and know deep knowledge. However, we need to distinguish between them. In elementary, middle, and high school, you should learn the basics and practical things. It will make us live well and enjoy the basic human life. However, if you go to university, you should learn deeper and more professional knowledge. Coding skills and professional mathematics. Unfortunately, I think the number of universities in Korea is too high. Even if you graduate from high school, you should be able to live your life enough, and I think that college should be attended by someone who really loves learning.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA

The idea is that schools should teach both.We need to learn practical things and know deep knowledge. However, we need to distinguish between them.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> I believe schools should teach both practical skills and academic knowledge because both are essential for success in life. However, the balance between them should depend on the level of education.

In elementary, middle, and high school, you should learn the basics and practical things.

>>> In elementary, middle, and high school, students should focus on learning fundamental academic subjects as well as practical life skills.

It will make us live well and enjoy the basic human life.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> It will help us live independently and enjoy a good quality of life.

However, if you go to university, you should learn deeper and more professional knowledge.

>>> However, once you go to university, you should focus on gaining more specialized and in-depth knowledge.

Coding skills and professional mathematics.

>>> For example, they can study computer programming and advanced mathematics.

Unfortunately, I think the number of universities in Korea is too high.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> Unfortunately, I think there are too many universities in Korea.

Even if you graduate from high school, you should be able to live your life enough, and I think that college should be attended by someone who really loves learning.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> Even if you only graduate from high school, you should still have the knowledge and skills to live independently. I believe university should be for people who are genuinely passionate about learning or who need specialized knowledge for their careers.

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