My memorable food while traveling
학생이 쓴 원문
Once I traveled alone to Jinhae where is famous for cherry blossom destination.That day,I hiked alone about 20km in the mountains around Jinhae. There were thriving cherry blossoms and a lot of people watching those flowers and enjoying the Spring. When I finished hiking, I went to the traditional local market to look around. I smelled something delicious and walked following the smell. There was a humble restaurant they served Seonji Gukbap(Korean blood pudding soup with rice). I didn\'t really like it, it was not to my taste.But I was traveling so I was willing to try something different, and I was hungry,needed some rest after walking all day.I decided to try it. When I ate one spoon of this soup,I felt strange comfort, the feeling was so touched, I was almost crying. Why? I didn\'t know, but I can guess now. Probably I was exhausted from a hiking, being alone all day in the crowd, I might feel loneliness without noticing by myself.The warm and delicious food made me relax and unwind.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your wonderful memory. I sincerely appreciate it.
Also, you did a wonderful job in writing your essay. I just did some corrections in some sentences. ^^
~ Teacher Gina
>> Once I traveled alone to Jinhae, which is famous as a cherry blossom destination.
>> Or: I once took a solo trip to Jinhae, which is a well-known spot for its cherry blossoms.
That day,I hiked alone about 20km in the mountains around Jinhae.
>> CORRECT.
There were thriving cherry blossoms and a lot of people watching those flowers and enjoying the Spring.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: The blossoms were thriving, and many people were there to admire the flowers and the spring season.
When I finished hiking, I went to the traditional local market to look around.
>> CORRECT.
I smelled something delicious and walked following the smell.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I smelled something delicious and followed it to its source.
There was a humble restaurant they served Seonji Gukbap(Korean blood pudding soup with rice).
>> There was a humble restaurant that served Seonji Gukbap.
I didn\'t really like it, it was not to my taste.
>> CORRECT.
But I was traveling so I was willing to try something different, and I was hungry,needed some rest after walking all day.
>> But I was traveling ,so I was willing to try something different, and I was hungry and needed some rest after walking all day.
I decided to try it.
>> CORRECT.
When I ate one spoon of this soup,I felt strange comfort, the feeling was so touched, I was almost crying.
>> When I had one spoonful of this soup, I felt a strange comfort; the feeling was so touching that I was almost crying.
>> Or: When I had one spoonful of this soup, I felt a strange comfort; the feeling was so touching that I was nearly moved to tears.
Why? I didn\'t know, but I can guess now.
>> CORRECT.
Probably I was exhausted from a hiking, being alone all day in the crowd, I might feel loneliness without noticing by myself.
>> Probably I was exhausted from hiking; being alone all day in the crowd, I might have felt lonely without noticing it myself.
The warm and delicious food made me relax and unwind.
>> CORRECT.
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