Self-introducing draft for monday

2026-05-04 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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I’m an adaptable person who tries to find the finest way to deal with the problem and engages in the discussion. I also try to use innovative means to work effectively. I served for student’s council when I was in university. Because of the mistake that ex-council member had made, we had to compensate 400 dollars for penalty. This made us difficult to use enough money to prepare for other events. There, I suggested council members to combine two events into one, so that we can reduce budget needed to borrow two places for each event. The idea worked well, and we were able to save about 350 dollars by renting only one restaurant for the event. Furthermore, students were more satisfied with the combined event because they could enjoy plentiful content at once. I also have experience of enhancing data analysis. While I was interning in Kepco-enc, I found out that my co-workers have difficulty when they analyze the list of applicants for selecting deserver. My team had to list not only the

강사 첨삭

Hi Rennie!

I noticed that your draft is not complete. I\'m guessing you reached the limit for the number of characters per upload. Please note that the number of characters per upload is limited. Also, you can upload only three times a day. I suggest you upload separately the part that was left out, so I\'ll have the complete version of your draft. It\'s better to have the complete draft before editing it. I\'ll wait for the second upload then. 


Cheers, 
Jean~~

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