Should schools allow students to wear any fashion style they want? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it\'s a very hard question, and there are diverse opinions for students\' fashion. Usually, when we argue that we need to allow students to wear any fashion due to their freedom of expression. However, this issue makes other issues that freedom of fashion may give a pressure to non-fashionable person or poor family, Therefore, almost school choose a school uniform to decrease a gap between diverse economic states of family. And other positive point of school uniform is that we don\'t need to consider what we wear in daily life and it reduce the time for preparation in the morning.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Mary! Your response shows strong critical thinking because you considered both freedom of expression and equality issues. I like how you explained the social impact of fashion choices, especially regarding economic differences, which makes your argument more thoughtful and realistic. You also clearly supported school uniforms with practical benefits like reducing morning stress. To improve, focus on grammar accuracy (plural forms like “schools,” “students”), smoother sentence structures, and clearer phrasing. Overall, your answer is thoughtful, balanced, and well-reasoned, great job!
-Teacher Wela
I think it\'s a very hard question, and there are diverse opinions for students\' fashion.
>> I think it\'s a very difficult question, and there are diverse opinions about students’ fashion.
Usually, when we argue that we need to allow students to wear any fashion due to their freedom of expression.
>> People usually argue that students should be allowed to wear any fashion because of freedom of expression.
However, this issue makes other issues that freedom of fashion may give a pressure to non-fashionable person or poor family,
>> However, this raises other issues, such as the idea that fashion freedom may put pressure on less fashionable students or students from low-income families.
Therefore, almost school choose a school uniform to decrease a gap between diverse economic states of family.
>> Therefore, most schools choose school uniforms to reduce the gap between students from different economic backgrounds.
And other positive point of school uniform is that we don\'t need to consider what we wear in daily life and it reduce the time for preparation in the morning.
>> Another positive point of school uniforms is that students do not need to think about what to wear every day, and it reduces preparation time in the morning.
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