Should vacations be expensive to be enjoyable?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it depends on where to go and what to do.
If you don\'t want to spend a lot of money, you can go on a vacation to rural erea rather than cities.
And you can enjoy running, hiking, fishing, swim[이름]g or just relaxing with the beautiful surroundings.
I\'d like to tell my story.
I went to the beach a lot in summer, but I didn\'t spend money very much.
Because I slept in my car or tent and I had almost all I need like snorkeling equipments, parasol, table, kitchen tools like that.
So, I didn\'t need to rent anything and it helped me to save my money.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름] [이름]! Your answer clearly explains that vacations don’t need to be expensive to be enjoyable, and your personal story supports your point very well. Great use of examples like sleeping in a car or bringing your own equipment, it makes your experience relatable.
-Teacher Wela
If you don\'t want to spend a lot of money, you can go on a vacation to rural erea rather than cities.
>> If you don\'t want to spend a lot of money, you can go on a vacation to a rural area rather than a city.
And you can enjoy running, hiking, fishing, swim[이름]g or just relaxing with the beautiful surroundings.
>> You can enjoy running, hiking, fishing, swim[이름]g, or just relaxing in the beautiful surroundings.
I went to the beach a lot in summer, but I didn\'t spend money very much.
>> I went to the beach a lot in the summer, but I didn’t spend much money.
Because I slept in my car or tent and I had almost all I need like snorkeling equipments, parasol, table, kitchen tools like that.
>> I slept in my car or a tent and had almost everything I needed, like snorkeling equipment, a parasol, a table, and kitchen tools.
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