Some people say too many tourists damage natural places. Do you agree or disagree?
학생이 쓴 원문
I agree with that.
Some people throw trash anywhere and do not care about environment prevent.
As a result, I\'ve seen that some tourist places prohibited accessing from tourists.
I hope all tourist will be aware of what to do and how to do while traveling and follow it.
I don\'t even want to mention like you should throw trash in a trash can, because it\'s really common sense!
In another case, human\'s body temperature and carbon emissions can damage nature.
강사 첨삭
Your response clearly expresses your agreement and gives strong, practical reasons to support your opinion. I like how you used real-world examples, such as littering and restricted tourist areas, which make your argument more convincing. Your tone also shows genuine concern for the environment, which adds impact to your answer. To improve, focus on word choice like “environmental protection,” plural forms such as “tourists,” and smoother phrasing. Overall, your response is passionate, relevant, and well-supported, great job!
-Teacher Wela
Some people throw trash anywhere and do not care about environment prevent.
>> Some people throw trash anywhere and do not care about environmental protection.
As a result, I\'ve seen that some tourist places prohibited accessing from tourists.
>> As a result, I have seen that some tourist places have prohibited access to visitors.
I hope all tourist will be aware of what to do and how to do while traveling and follow it.
>> I hope all tourists will be aware of what to do and how to behave while traveling and follow the rules.
I don\'t even want to mention like you should throw trash in a trash can, because it\'s really common sense!
>> I don’t even want to mention things like throwing trash in a bin because it’s basic common sense!
In another case, human\'s body temperature and carbon emissions can damage nature.
>> In addition, human body heat and carbon emissions can also damage natural environments.
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