spending money on objects or on experiences
학생이 쓴 원문
When I think about spending money on objects or experiences, my first thought is buying objects is good because I can use it a lot, also paying for experience is good too, because it might make me fun and help me grow as a human. A few years ago, I bought a paddle board. People around me might have thought that, \"she finally bought a dumb and useless board, she was already old enough to take SUP\". But I\'m still enjoying SUP under the sun. And another story: once I signed up for painting lesson. I don\'t paint anymore because my eyesight has got worse. I can\'t forget how much I happy in front of my easel. So, What I spend on is not matter, as long as I get satisfied and it lead me to better life, every penny is worth it.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for submitting your answer. ^^
There were minor corrections I made to make your sentences clearer and more natural.
Also, I totally agree with you; when it comes to spending, whether it is for an object or experience, the most important thing is that they will help us grow as a person and satisfy us where we can feel genuine happiness. ^^
~ Teacher Gina
>> When I think about spending money on objects or experiences, my first thought is that buying objects is good because I can use them a lot However, paying for experiences is also good because it can be fun and help me grow as a person.
A few years ago, I bought a paddle board.
>> CORRECT.
People around me might have thought that, \"she finally bought a dumb and useless board, she was already old enough to take SUP\".
>> People around me might have thought, “She finally bought a useless board. She\'s already too old to take SUP.”
>> Or: People around me might have thought, “She finally bought a useless board. She\'s already past the age to take SUP.\"
But I\'m still enjoying SUP under the sun.
>> CORRECT.
And another story: once I signed up for painting lesson.
>> And another story: Once, I signed up for painting lesson.
I don\'t paint anymore because my eyesight has got worse.
>> I don’t paint anymore because my eyesight has gotten worse.
I can\'t forget how much I happy in front of my easel.
>> I can’t forget how happy I felt in front of my easel.
So, What I spend on is not matter, as long as I get satisfied and it lead me to better life, every penny is worth it.
>> So, what I spend money on doesn’t matter. As long as it satisfies me and leads me to a better life, every penny is worth it.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.