The biggest changes in how families are.
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When I was a kid, it was common that 3 generations lived under the same roof, it was sure for wife to live with parents-in-law, my family was too. And wife had all responsibilities for house chores, she cooked 3 meals, did the laundry, cleaned the house and cared kids and elders etc.Also people blamed or looked down single mom without any fare reason. I think it was hard time for woman and wife. and it is understandable that modern young ladies avoid marriage and having kids in my country. And yet, many young couples get married and start family. They commonly don\'t live with parents. I think not to live with parents is essential, to have kids is choice for young couples. And the couples who unmarried but live together increase. In the past this wasn\'t allowed in the society and rare. But It could be another family structure now. Being smaller and various is the takeaway of the modern family. But family bond will be still and strong even the family forms change to smaller.
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When I was a kid, it was common that 3 generations lived under the same roof, it was sure for wife to live with parents-in-law, my family was too.
>> When I was a kid, it was common for three generations to live under the same roof, and it was expected for a wife to live with her parents-in-law. My family was like that too.
And wife had all responsibilities for house chores, she cooked 3 meals, did the laundry, cleaned the house and cared kids and elders etc.
>> The wife had all the responsibilities for household chores. She cooked three meals, did the laundry, cleaned the house, and took care of the children and the elderly, etc.
Also people blamed or looked down single mom without any fare reason.
>> Also, people blamed or looked down on single mothers without any fair reason.
I think it was hard time for woman and wife. and it is understandable that modern young ladies avoid marriage and having kids in my country.
>> I think it was a hard time for women and wives, and it is understandable that modern young women avoid marriage and having children in my country.
And yet, many young couples get married and start family.
>> And yet, many young couples get married and start a family.
They commonly don\'t live with parents.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Most of them do not live with their parents.
>> Or: Most of them do not live with their parents.
I think not to live with parents is essential, to have kids is choice for young couples.
>> I think not living with parents is essential, and having children is a choice for young couples.
And the couples who unmarried but live together increase.
>> And the number of unmarried couples who live together is increasing.
>> Or: And cohabitation among unmarried couples is becoming more common.
In the past this wasn\'t allowed in the society and rare.
>> In the past, this wasn’t allowed in society and was rare.
But It could be another family structure now.
>> But it could be another form of family structure now.
Being smaller and various is the takeaway of the modern family.
>> Being smaller and more diverse is the main feature of modern families.
But family bond will be still and strong even the family forms change to smaller.
>> But family bonds will still be strong even as family structures become smaller.
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