The enchanted clock 2. By Ji- [이름]

2016-05-23 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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And before I knew it I was back home. When I came home, I loo at the clock, and it was the same time before I left. And ten I felt a little tired. So I went straigt to my bed room. And then I went to sleep. At my dream, there was a flying elephant coming toward me. And then the elephant held my hand, and then we dance and dance until were so disy. And then I woke up. THE END BYE~~BYE~~

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Ji[이름]! This was such a wonderful ending to your story! You\'ve got some writing skills! Keep up the good work. Please review my corrections below. Check the spelling of some words too. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ And before I knew it I was back home. >> CORRECT! When I came home, I loo at the clock, and it was the same time before I left. >> When I came home, I looked at the clock and it was the same time before I left.And ten I felt a little tired. >> I suddenly felt a little tired.So I went straigt to my bed room. >> CORRECT! >> straight And then I went to sleep. >> CORRECT! At my dream, there was a flying elephant coming toward me. >> In my dream, there was a flying elephant coming toward me.And then the elephant held my hand, and then we dance and dance until were so disy. >> The elephant then held my hand and we danced and danced until we were dizzy.And then I woke up. >> CORRECT!

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