the importance of happiness
학생이 쓴 원문
I think happiness is important. This is because happiness has the power to make people live even for one more day. People live their lives by being happy and dreaming of a happy life and enduring pain.
강사 첨삭
I think happiness is important. This is because happiness has the power to make people live even for one more day.
>> I think happiness is important because it has the power to help people keep going, even for just one more day.
People live their lives by being happy and dreaming of a happy life and enduring pain.
>> People live their lives by seeking happiness, dreaming of a better life, and enduring pain along the way.
OR >> People live their lives by seeking happiness, dreaming of a better life, and enduring pain.
OR >> People live their lives by seeking happiness, dreaming of a better life, and enduring pain.
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