Think about famous people, influencers, or public figures you know. Is there anyone you believe show
학생이 쓴 원문
If I should [이름]ose only one public figure who shows true personality while on camera, I would like to select a legendary football player of Chelsea FC, N’Golo Kanté. Although he is currently past his prime, he is undoubtedly a world-class midfielder who has left remarkable legacies, like league titles in The Premium League and a World Cup win. He is in a position to show off, though he has never done, and been loved by the public because of his humility. His actions shows consistency and genuineness. He always shows same attitude on and off the pitch. In addition, he never flaunts his fame. He is not active on social media, and is far from living a fancy lifestyle. For example, he once became a topic since he drove his broken Mini Cooper, contrary to super cars that many other players usually drive. These demonstrates why he have cute image among world\'s football fans. I am attracted to this kind of person, and aspire to become someone like that, who is humble and values everyday life.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
I really enjoyed how you highlighted Kanté’s humility with vivid details like the Mini Cooper story. What stands out is your ability to connect his personality to your own values, which gives your essay depth. You could make the conclusion even stronger by explaining how humility influences everyday [이름]ices, not just fame.
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
If I should [이름]ose only one public figure who shows true personality while on camera, I would like to select a legendary football player of Chelsea FC, N’Golo Kanté.
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
If I should [이름]ose only one public figure who shows true personality while on camera, I would like to select a legendary football player of Chelsea FC, N’Golo Kanté.
~ If I had to [이름]ose only one public figure who shows true personality on camera, it would be the legendary football player of Chelsea FC, N’Golo Kanté.
Although he is currently past his prime, he is undoubtedly a world-class midfielder who has left remarkable legacies, like league titles in The Premium League and a World Cup win.
~ CORRECT.
He is in a position to show off, though he has never done, and been loved by the public because of his humility.
~ He is in a position to show off, but he has never done so, and he is loved by the public because of his humility.
His actions shows consistency and genuineness. He always shows same attitude on and off the pitch.
~ His actions show consistency and genuineness, as he always displays the same attitude on and off the pitch.
In addition, he never flaunts his fame.
~ CORRECT.
He is not active on social media, and is far from living a fancy lifestyle.
~ CORRECT.
For example, he once became a topic since he drove his broken Mini Cooper, contrary to super cars that many other players usually drive.
~ For example, he once became a topic of discussion because he drove his old Mini Cooper, unlike many other players who usually drive supercars.
These demonstrates why he have cute image among world\'s football fans.
~ These demonstrate why he has a “cute” image among football fans worldwide.
I am attracted to this kind of person, and aspire to become someone like that, who is humble and values everyday life.
~ I am attracted to this kind of person and aspire to become someone like him-- humble and valuing everyday life.
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