vocational education
학생이 쓴 원문
If we provide a balanced basic education, it can be positive influence on vocational education basically.
Current vocational education pursues rasing industrial worker quickly using young students for government\'s economic development
Government and big companies offer many benefits to them like giving a carrot(advantages).
I agree some parts, if some students who prefer to learn skill to studying, vocational high schools maybe be better.
Even vocational schools must be emphasized basic knowledge and refinement be needde as a human.
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Ms. [이름]!
Hello there again. Thank you for sparing the time to write your thoughts, even on your busy days.
I agree with you. Young people prefer working rather than studying becuase they find schooling not enjoyable, so these kinds of vocational high schools will be helpful for them. However, it should be a voluntary system. Only those who are willing will be part of the program.
Aki~
If we provide a balanced basic education, it can be positive influence on vocational education basically.
>>> If we provide a balanced basic education, it can be a positive influence on vocational education.
Current vocational education pursues rasing industrial worker quickly using young students for government\'s economic development
>> The current vocational education system pursues raising industrial workers quickly, using young students for the government\'s economic development
Government and big companies offer many benefits to them like giving a carrot(advantages).
>> The government and big companies offer many benefits to them, like giving them a carrot.
>> The government and big companies offer many benefits to them, like giving them great compensation.
I agree some parts, if some students who prefer to learn skill to studying, vocational high schools maybe be better.
>> I agree with some parts, if some students prefer to learn skills rather than studying, then vocational high schools may be better.
Even vocational schools must be emphasized basic knowledge and refinement be needde as a human.
>> Even vocational schools must emphasize basic knowledge, and refinement is needed as a human.
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