What activities can we do during the spring season in Korea?
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First, the most famous activity is visiting [이름]kchon Lake. That park has developed as a place of beautiful cherry blossoms, so every year, lots of beautiful photos are posted on SNS. Actually I haven\'t visited there yet, just have seen there online. Because whenever I was supposed to go, there was so crowded with people. So, I recommend to visit at night-time. I saw the picture taken at night, it was more fantastic than at daytime. The park always opens 24-hour. Second, if you have enough time, I recommend to visit Nonsan Strawberry Festival. It is held every late of March and has various of foods made with strawberries. Makgeolli, Tteokbokki and many other foods are made with strawberries and sold in the festival. Although the location doesn\'t have good accessibility and you might wait long time, many people visit and enjoy there. It seems to have an unique experience. I\'m sure that will be enjoyable!
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Hi, Sunny!
It\'s nice to know that there are great places and festivals during spring. I hope you can visit [이름]kchon Lake soon, but if you really want to visit to see the cherry blossoms, it might be a bit difficult since it\'s peak season. I hope I can visit and enjoy these places and events in Korea soon!
- T. Caitlyn
First, the most famous activity is visiting [이름]kchon Lake.
>> CORRECT
That park has developed as a place of beautiful cherry blossoms, so every year, lots of beautiful photos are posted on SNS.
>> CORRECT
Actually I haven\'t visited there yet, just have seen there online.
>> Actually, I haven\'t visited it yet, just seen it online.
Because whenever I was supposed to go, there was so crowded with people.
>> Whenever I was supposed to go, it was always so crowded with people.
So, I recommend to visit at night-time.
>> So, I recommend visiting at night.
I saw the picture taken at night, it was more fantastic than at daytime.
>> I saw pictures taken at night, and they were more fantastic than those taken during the day.
The park always opens 24-hour.
>> The park is open 24 hours a day.
Second, if you have enough time, I recommend to visit Nonsan Strawberry Festival.
>> Second, if you have enough time, I recommend visiting the Nonsan Strawberry Festival.
It is held every late of March and has various of foods made with strawberries.
>> It is held every late March and has various foods made with strawberries.
Makgeolli, Tteokbokki and many other foods are made with strawberries and sold in the festival.
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Although the location doesn\'t have good accessibility and you might wait long time, many people visit and enjoy there.
>> Although the location doesn\'t have good accessibility and you might have to wait a long time, many people visit and enjoy it.
It seems to have an unique experience.
>> It seems to offer a unique experience.
I\'m sure that will be enjoyable!
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