What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a competitive society?
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The advantage of competitive society is that it has to compete, so it has to compete fateully. So, you will be able to get to know yourself well and get an opportunity to develop yourself while competing.
The disadvantage of competitive society is that it can induce excessive competition because it is a society that survives only whe competing. In addition, it will be difficult to make friendships and there will be a high probability of becoming a harsh society by considering each other as enemies.
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The advantage of competitive society is that it has to compete, so it has to compete fateully.
>> One advantage of a competitive society is that people are motivated to compete fairly and improve themselves.
So, you will be able to get to know yourself well and get an opportunity to develop yourself while competing.
>> CORRECT.
The disadvantage of competitive society is that it can induce excessive competition because it is a society that survives only whe competing.
>> The disadvantage of a competitive society is that it can induce excessive competition because it is a society that survives only when competing.
In addition, it will be difficult to make friendships and there will be a high probability of becoming a harsh society by considering each other as enemies.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: In addition, it may become difficult to build friendships, and society may become harsher if people start seeing each other as rivals or enemies.
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