What do you think is the importance of dividing house chores equally among family members or housema

2026-06-23 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

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First of all, it can be said that it is fair to divide it equally considering the time, avaliability and possibility of family members or housemates. So, I think the importance of dividing house chores equally among family members or housemates are that they can be resposible. Responsibility is important to a person, but it will make them think about what to do to complete something, and they will recognize that being me is quite useful. That\'s why people have the patience to complete this task until the end and people have a sense of responsibility that they think is their jobs. Then, it goes through a lot of processes to create responsibility, and I can think of it as important because meaningful thoughts, work, and emotions arise in the process.

강사 첨삭

Hi! 

Great job in making your essay. I just did some minor corrections like with the spelling and verb used. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



First of all, it can be said that it is fair to divide it equally considering the time, avaliability and possibility of family members or housemates.
>> First of all, it can be said that it is fair to divide it equally considering the time, availability, and possibility of family members or housemates.

So, I think the importance of dividing house chores equally among family members or housemates are that they can be resposible.
>> So, I think the importance of dividing house chores equally among family members or housemates is that they can be responsible.
 
Responsibility is important to a person, but it will make them think about what to do to complete something, and they will recognize that being me is quite useful. 
>> CORRECT.

That\'s why people have the patience to complete this task until the end and people have a sense of responsibility that they think is their jobs. 
>> That\'s why people have the patience to complete this task until the end, and people have a sense of responsibility that they think is their job. 

Then, it goes through a lot of processes to create responsibility, and I can think of it as important because meaningful thoughts, work, and emotions arise in the process.
>> CORRECT. 

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