What is a new capability you would like to develop by the end of this year?

2026-06-29 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

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If I think about one thing, I\'d like to make a dessert map. It is not a map that makes which dessert tastes good in which area, but a map that shows where the delicious dessert is, how much quantity is left, and how crowded it is. There\'s a reason why I thought of this, but it\'s because of the Dubai chewy cookie that is popular this time. These days, trends change quickly and don\'t last long. Therefore, when it comes to trend, people are showing a habit of wanting to try it quickly. Earlier this year, a dessert called Duvai chewy cookie was in trend. As soon as they made it, people bought it and the price went up very quickly, very much, I also went to the shops selling it to try it, I didn\'t have the quantity, so I had to come back home in vain, and people would be very crowded and feel uncomfortable waiting for a long time. So, I thought I wanted to make something to solve it, I came up with this idea.

강사 첨삭

Hi! 

Thank you for submitting your answer. Great job in expressing it. Also, I like this idea! I think it will be really nice to have this kind of map. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


If I think about one thing, I\'d like to make a dessert map.
>>  CORRECT.

It is not a map that makes which dessert tastes good in which area, but a map that shows where the delicious dessert is, how much quantity is left, and how crowded it is. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It is not a map showing which desserts are good in each area, but a map that shows where delicious desserts are available, how much stock is left, and how crowded each place is.

There\'s a reason why I thought of this, but it\'s because of the Dubai chewy cookie that is popular this time.
>> CORRECT.

These days, trends change quickly and don\'t last long. 
>> CORRECT.

Therefore, when it comes to trend, people are showing a habit of wanting to try it quickly.
>> Therefore, when it comes to trends, people are showing a habit of wanting to try it quickly.

Earlier this year, a dessert called Duvai chewy cookie was in trend. 
>> Earlier this year, a dessert called Dubai chewy cookie was trending.

As soon as they made it, people bought it and the price went up very quickly, very much, 
>> As soon as it was released, people bought it, and the price increased very quickly.

I also went to the shops selling it to try it, I didn\'t have the quantity, so I had to come back home in vain, and people would be very crowded and feel uncomfortable waiting for a long time. 
>> I also went to shops selling it to try it, but there was no stock, so I had to go home in vain, and the shops were very crowded, making it uncomfortable to wait for a long time.

So, I thought I wanted to make something to solve it, I came up with this idea.
>> So I wanted to solve this problem, and that’s how I came up with this idea.

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