What is your favorite festival? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t remember the exact name of the festival, but there was a festival where many food trucks could gather and taste various foods, and I think the festival was the best.
The festival was also an atmosphere for other family to enjoy, and I could enjoy many foods because I love eating so much.
강사 첨삭
Hi!
You did a good job describing the event. I’ve updated the phrasing to sound a bit more natural. Well done! ^^
~ Teacher Gina
I don\'t remember the exact name of the festival, but there was a festival where many food trucks could gather and taste various foods, and I think the festival was the best.
>> I don’t remember the exact name of the festival, but there was a festival where many food trucks gathered and people could try various kinds of food. I think that festival was the best.
The festival was also an atmosphere for other family to enjoy, and I could enjoy many foods because I love eating so much.
>> The festival also had a great atmosphere for families to enjoy, and I was able to try many kinds of food because I love eating so much.
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